The black sheep of the family (Friday Fictioneers)

This week I’ve written a reply to Mr Binks’ story Docked Her which can be read here (Mr Binks did this with my story last week… and oh what fun it can be!)

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PHOTO PROMPT Copyright-Ted Strutz

Image by Ted Strutz at http://tedstrutz.com/

She wanted to tell her father. But there was never a good moment. If he wasn’t at the dental surgery he was away fishing on the high seas.

Dad was a dentist and a fisherman. Just like his father. And father’s father.

But she wanted something else. He just wouldn’t understand.

One Thursday afternoon, she went to the surgery to tell him once and for all.

‘Dad, I’m thinking of becoming-’

A boat at the dock blasted its horn.

‘Let’s talk next time.’ Dad grabbed his suitcase and rushed out the door.

‘…an optometrist,’ she said, to an empty room.

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Friday Fictioneers is a challenge set by Rochelle Fields where writers around the world create 100 word stories inspired by the one image. For more information see:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/06/11/13-june-2014

42 Comments

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42 responses to “The black sheep of the family (Friday Fictioneers)

  1. Dear Jessie,

    Daddy can certainly understand passion and desire, can’t he? I wonder what she’d say if she saw his performance. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  2. MrBinks

    I appear to have started a “thing”.

    Nicely played, Jessie. Nicely played.

  3. Well it is a big debate – a good eye or a solid tooth ! 🙂

  4. Good story Jessie. If only he would have seen her!!

  5. What a great play off Docked Her, Well done.

  6. high five and raspberries

    ahhh..so she thinks he is out fishing lol. well done

  7. She’s in for a shock if she thinks she’s the black sheep 😉
    Good reply to Docked Her

  8. Very cool-I didn’t ‘see’ that coming!

  9. So, just who is this Mr. Binks guy? Must investigate.

    An Optometrist… pretty funny… poor dad… serves him right though.

  10. Jessie, That was a funny follow-up to Mr. Bink’s story. His daughter really has a surprise coming some day. 😀 —Susan

  11. I love the way you played off Mr Binks’ story, Jessie. It gives a whole other layer to your story. Well done.

  12. Nicely played. An optometrist? I guess the eyes have it.

  13. An optometrist is perfect if you think about it – all they need is an ear doctor in the family and they’ve got the whole face covered 🙂
    A brilliantly silly reply to Mr Binks’ madness!

  14. Maybe she cant see his shaved legs without glasses.. hmm..

  15. Great follow-up to Docked Her! Those hidden things we find so difficult to share.

    Writing a duet is great fun isn’t it! Ron and I have done that for our pieces this week, too. 🙂

  16. That works great on its own (dentist-optometrist rivalry) or as a second part to Mr Binks’ story. Well done!

  17. Ho ho! He will be upset. Lovely!

  18. Wonder what dad would have thought of that…and did his absence from her life influence her decision? Great mind-bender…

  19. Doctors & dentists are always rushing out the door! No time to listen.

  20. Pingback: 10. Lord of the Flies – William Golding (100 book challenge) | Jessie Ansons

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