One tiny window (Friday Fictioneers)

Front door battered and scratched. Lift the lock while you turn the key. Great location.

Up a flight of stairs. Along a dark narrow corridor. Up a steep wooden ladder.

This was the room for rent.

Small. With one tiny window overlooking the Plaza de la Merced. A bed, a desk and a chest of drawers.

Perfect.

Stairs. Corridor. Ladder. One way in.

Later that night they finally found her. Looked like she’d been trying to push her blackened body through that one tiny window.

Great location. Views of the Plaza. One way in.

One way out.

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Friday Fictioneers is a challenge set by Rochelle Fields where writers around the world create 100 word stories inspired by the one image. For more information see: http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/03/19/21-march-2014/

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Want to read more from Jessie Ansons? Check out my recent blog post called: Why living with a brainiac is annoying.

60 Comments

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60 responses to “One tiny window (Friday Fictioneers)

  1. Apologies for the dark depressing stories I keep producing! I’ll aim for something more upbeat next week… I promise.

  2. Dear Jessie,

    Oooooooh. I can tell this is a week for dark and creepy. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  3. Lovely tale Jessie and yes a dark one but well told. I enjoyed this one.

  4. fabulous view! Great story. 🙂

  5. I was completely drawn in. Well told

  6. That was scary but well written. I would never have rented there. My dad was a fireman. Good description.

  7. Jessie, good job. Your short, sometimes terse, sentences really set the atmosphere.

    janet

  8. That got a shudder out of me. Truly terrible a fate to befall anyone!

  9. Jessie,
    and you were selling that place so well. 🙂 Actually, that would be the kind of place I’d be attracted to, but no kidding that only one way in and out is dangerous in an emergency. Great story. I like your narration style.
    -David

  10. You’ve painted a powerful picture here!

  11. Apparently, NO way out! 😉 Nice job!! I like the writing method at the beginning – snippets of imagery painting a picture. (Apparently “snippets” is my comment word for the week…)

  12. I complain about living on the ground floor, but it has its advantages…

  13. I love your short descriptions reminiscent of an ad for a creepy rental or something. Well-written!

  14. I have nightmares about steep stairs and inaccessible rooms – this story doesn’t help/.

  15. A dark mysterious tale. Leaving us wondering. Wanting more. Love it!

  16. Dark and tragic, a cautionary tale. Nicely written.

    All my best,
    MG

  17. Jessie, you’re an expert at letting the details tell the story. A dark one but well narrated.

  18. Jessie, good story and well told. Love the location of the room to rent. Although it is lacking in emergency exits. Good Tale, well done! Nan

  19. Very well crafted.
    AnElephant loves it.

  20. Oh, so dark, and so well told. I like the symmetry of this, ending the way it begins.

  21. Maree Gallop

    Great story! The seeds of darkness, isolation and damage were achieved in very few words early in the story which built mystery and suspense. Well done, the ending did not disappoint.

  22. Poor girl, she finds her perfect room with a great view and it turns into a death trap.
    Great story!

  23. Dark and depressing – yes, my genre also. I enjoyed this (if that’s the right word to use!).

  24. Sounds like a hostel I stayed in at the foot of Jaffa Street in Jerusalem. It was very nice, actually, but hard to get to the room … on the roof!

    Scary story. Nice!

    • At least on the roof you might have been able to do some sort of James Bond-leap to another rooftop in a fire! Thanks for reading. I’ve never been to Jerusalem but Jaffa St sounds very interesting.

  25. Oh.. I didn’t see that coming. Great way to end the story.

  26. Tough one. I thought she had found the perfect pad. Clever writing.

  27. How sad and you have tapped into the fear of so many of us, that of burning to death. Horrid!

  28. oooh. I feel uneasy after reading that! well done.

  29. Chilling and very well told Jessie

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