On the weekend our writers group held a live reading event at a local coffee shop in NSW, Australia. I was lucky enough to be the MC, and before introducing each of the readers I shared one of my Friday Fictioneers pieces. They went down a treat (Rochelle, you would be very proud)! To read about the event, follow this link.
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Image by Douglas M. MacIlroy at http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/
‘It’s our 10 year anniversary for God’s sake!’
He hadn’t listened. He’d insisted on wearing his slippers to the club.
Frayed at the edges, dripped-tea stained across the toes, one sole almost completely worn through.
‘They’re just so comfortable,’ he’d said.
I’d made such an effort. A new fitted dress, strappy sandals. A push-up bra!
We arrived at the club and the doorman looked down at our feet.
‘I can’t let you in,’ he said flatly.
Embarrassment crept up my neck and my cheeks flushed.
‘Covered footwear only. The slippers are fine, but sandals simply don’t meet the code.’
Read Part 2 of this story (or maybe this is Part 2?) written by Mr Binks at Me.You.Coffee.
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Friday Fictioneers is a challenge set by Rochelle Fields where writers around the world create 100 word stories inspired by the one image. For more information see:
http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/06/04/6-june-2014
ha!!! too precious:)
Thank you! Glad you liked it.
That’s funny, Jessie, but I can see it happening. You built the story well.
Thanks Karen for your lovely words 🙂
Reblogged this on me.you.coffee.
I like this. If you don’t mind I’m going to piggyback it and write from the other perspective 😉
What an awesome idea! And I love your piece to match mine. This week I’ll let you go first 😉
1) I’m glad I didn’t wait for you to say it was ok.
2) I’m glad you said it was ok!
3) I’m glad you’re glad!
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It figures!
Great story!
Thanks Jan!
Dear Jessie,
I laughed out loud at your last line. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
The perfect response is a laugh out loud! Thanks Rochelle. I like all the different paths taken from this week’s prompt.
Dear Jessie,
This was perfect. Still smiling.
Aloha,
Doug
Aloha Doug! Thanks for reading.
Highly entertaining, Jessie!
Greetings from Greece!
Maria (MM Jaye)
Thank you for stopping by (all the way from Greece!)
nice punchline!
Thank you! Glad you liked it 🙂
Ha. Clever one. I’m smiling.
Thanks Patrick, glad it could make you smile!
Jessie, Now I understand Mr. Bink’s story. Really funny and well written. It’s odd enough to be reality. 🙂 —Susan
Yes, the link with Binks was genius on his part!
Really funny
Glad you thought so 🙂
Hahaha! Good job, Jessie. A tandem effort if I ever saw one by you and Binks. Marvelous!
Glad you liked it and the tandem from Binks!
Best surprise ending I’ve read in years!! Love it.
Oh what wonderful feedback! Thank you!
Great twist, Jessie 🙂
Thanks Siobhan! Glad you liked the twist 🙂
Brilliant! Dress codes just dont make sense do they?
Haha, not at all!
but now i’ve read the partner piece to your story i realise there may be more to this than i first thought! Very cleverly done.
I have to admit it was Binks that added the deeper level… I just provided the inspiration!
Ah, okay. Well it was your great story that set him up 🙂
Oh shucks! Ok, I’ll take that one 🙂
🙂
I love it – covered feet only – so funny – BRILLIANT and GOOD story. I love it! Nan 🙂
Thank you so much!
I also went back and read some additional readings from your blog – you’re good and I enjoyed it very much. You live in Australia – New South Wales? Is that right? Thanks, Nan 🙂
Yes, I’m from Newcastle… about 2 hours north of Sydney. How about you?
Ha Ha! She should have listened to his sartorial advice instead. Score one for the boys 🙂
What a wonderful twist at the end. Love this – made me laugh. Thank you.
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That’s a twist. Good one.
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