This week I’ve written a reply to Mr Binks’ story Docked Her which can be read here (Mr Binks did this with my story last week… and oh what fun it can be!)
She wanted to tell her father. But there was never a good moment. If he wasn’t at the dental surgery he was away fishing on the high seas.
Dad was a dentist and a fisherman. Just like his father. And father’s father.
But she wanted something else. He just wouldn’t understand.
One Thursday afternoon, she went to the surgery to tell him once and for all.
‘Dad, I’m thinking of becoming-’
A boat at the dock blasted its horn.
‘Let’s talk next time.’ Dad grabbed his suitcase and rushed out the door.
‘…an optometrist,’ she said, to an empty room.
Friday Fictioneers is a challenge set by Rochelle Fields where writers around the world create 100 word stories inspired by the one image. For more information see:
42 responses to “The black sheep of the family (Friday Fictioneers)”
Daddy can certainly understand passion and desire, can’t he? I wonder what she’d say if she saw his performance. Nicely done.
Thanks for your comments Rochelle! Let’s hope she takes a cruise on the show boat soon 🙂
I appear to have started a “thing”.
Nicely played, Jessie. Nicely played.
You sure have! ! Thanks for reading 🙂
I really like your “thing”! Keep it up!
Greetings from Greece!
Maria (MM Jaye)
Thanks Hamish 🙂
Well it is a big debate – a good eye or a solid tooth ! 🙂
It could be quite beneficial to the family to have both, me thinks 🙂
Good story Jessie. If only he would have seen her!!
Thanks Maree – maybe he needs new glasses.
What a great play off Docked Her, Well done.
Glad you liked it Alicia!
Thanks for reading 🙂 PS I love the name of your blog.
ahhh..so she thinks he is out fishing lol. well done
Yes, glad you got it!
She’s in for a shock if she thinks she’s the black sheep 😉
Good reply to Docked Her
Thanks Siobhan! Hopefully he’ll let her follow her dreams if she finds out…
Very cool-I didn’t ‘see’ that coming!
Oh, I love a good optometery pun!
So, just who is this Mr. Binks guy? Must investigate.
An Optometrist… pretty funny… poor dad… serves him right though.
Yes, please do! I only met ‘this Binks guy’ through Friday Fictioneers so I can’t completely vouch for his character 😉
Jessie, That was a funny follow-up to Mr. Bink’s story. His daughter really has a surprise coming some day. 😀 —Susan
Yes, she sure does. Thanks for reading 🙂
I love the way you played off Mr Binks’ story, Jessie. It gives a whole other layer to your story. Well done.
Thanks Karen! We’re calling it #replyfiction on Twitter. Maybe it will become ‘a thing’…
Nicely played. An optometrist? I guess the eyes have it.
Ha! Yes, they sure do.
An optometrist is perfect if you think about it – all they need is an ear doctor in the family and they’ve got the whole face covered 🙂
A brilliantly silly reply to Mr Binks’ madness!
Thanks, glad you liked it 🙂 Maybe we need another #replyfiction to add the ear specialist.
Maybe she cant see his shaved legs without glasses.. hmm..
Ha! I just pictured a dentist in shorts and it seemed to work.
Great follow-up to Docked Her! Those hidden things we find so difficult to share.
Writing a duet is great fun isn’t it! Ron and I have done that for our pieces this week, too. 🙂
Yes! So much fun 🙂 A little challenging at first but fun nonetheless!
That works great on its own (dentist-optometrist rivalry) or as a second part to Mr Binks’ story. Well done!
Thank you! Glad you think they work on their own and together 🙂
Ho ho! He will be upset. Lovely!
Wonder what dad would have thought of that…and did his absence from her life influence her decision? Great mind-bender…
Doctors & dentists are always rushing out the door! No time to listen.
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