Mr Binks challenged me to a #replyfiction this week so here it is. To read Binks’ story called Promises, click here. Over to you next week Binks!
Image by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields at http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/
She was working as a waitress in a cocktail bar.
That much was true.
Why do you keep saying that?
Sorry, keep going.
I walked into the bar, feeling pretty good about myself. I’d just won a promotion and bought a new car. She promised me everything. Said we belonged together.
And you believed her?
She was very convincing. Very good at what she did. I proposed that very night.
And this was…?
…30 years ago today.
And now you’re working as a waiter in a cocktail bar?
I told you… she was very good at what she did.
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Nicely done parallel, which surprised me totally. And very effective use of “Don’t You Want Me” as well.
Now that songs stuck in my head! Good job.
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Nicely tackled, my dear 😀
Yep – thanks for the ear-worm 🙂
I liked the dialogue structure you used, particularly italics/normal fonts for the different speakers – removes the need for “speech marks”, names, any other identifiers. Worked really well.
“But I gotta tell ya, folks …”
Nice work, Jessie! Funny ending.
Dear Jessie,
Perfect complement to Mr. Binks’ story. Nicely done. Fortunately, I don’t know the song that’s stuck in at least two heads. 😉
Shalom,
Rochelle
Good job, Jessie.
janet
Indeed that song you can milk for many stories…
Good response.
Dear Jessie,
Now I’m lost in that song. Such a wonderful lost, though. Well done.
Aloha,
Doug
Lovely, and the song is sticking, damnit.
I’ve got that song stuck in my head too now 🙂
I guess she’s moved on. With his car and everything else.
Excellent bit of dialog, Jessie. That’s a story I’d read.
Just read the other comments… what the hell’s the song, I can’t remember.
Don’t you want me baby, don’t you want me ooooooo… 😀 Great, great story!
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