Unicorns and rainbows (Friday Fictioneers)

Image from Kelly Sands at http://appropriateadult.wordpress.com/

“There’s a unicorn who lives in a stable above the clouds and his name is Paul and he visits me just before I go to sleep at night and every boy has his own unicorn.”

His older sister scoffs and says, “There’s no such thing as unicorns.”

“Paul says unicorns only visit the children who believe in unicorns.”

“But there’s no such thing as unicorns.”

That night he stares at the ceiling repeating his sister’s words in his head.

Paul, all saddled up and ready to go, makes a last minute decision that night to stay in his stable.

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Friday Fictioneers is a challenge set by Rochelle Fields where writers around the world create 100 word stories inspired by the one image. For more information see: http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/07/09/11-july-2014/

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49 responses to “Unicorns and rainbows (Friday Fictioneers)

  1. Marg jackson

    Great story Jess. you always have a unique take on the photos. I love to find the notice of the next one in my inbox.

  2. And that’s how dreams are crushed. Great story, as usual.

  3. high five and raspberries

    Awe..poor child. I for one, believe in unicorns and am not afraid to say so! Well done Jess!

  4. That was really, really sad. Good one.

  5. Ah, Jessie, it always seems a little sad when children finally have to grow up. A touching take on the photo cue.

    • Thank you Diana! I’ve been telling my son all about rainbows and unicorns lately and it got me feeling sad that he won’t always believe in the magical horse in the clouds…

  6. Jessie, Well-written story. Poor little boy and poor Paul. It’s hard sometimes to grow up. Well done. 🙂 —Susan

  7. I love your story! Beautifully told. Belief (or non-belief) makes the unreal real (or not.)

  8. Lyrics: Gus Kahn
    “…While I’m alone and blue as can be
    Dream a little dream of me.”

    Poor Paul.

  9. Sisters! They can ruin so many things (as well as make them better.) The voice of the little boy is spot on.

  10. Crushed dreams! Sad, but I think Paul is a dreamer at heart, so he’ll continue to dream on … Well told lovely story.

  11. Aww, sad, I hope Paul finds another kid who still believes. Thanks a bunch, big sis. Cleverly written!
    Puts me in mind of poor Puff the Magic Dragon after Jackie Paper grew up and stopped visiting him 😦

  12. A lovely take on that moment where belief begins to crack.

  13. Ahh, everyone can relate to the moment when a little bit of magic was taken out of our lives. You captured that moment poignantly, Jessie.

  14. A lovely story. Our dreams are so fragile.

  15. I believe in unicorns too! How I wish she hadn’t forced her thoughts on him.

  16. A boy with conviction. And ready to learn one of life’s lessons: there ain’t no unicorns.

  17. Ah! The end of innocence, nicely conveyed.

  18. Dear Jessie,

    Aw, Ali beat me to the punch. This felt so much like Puff the Magic Dragon. Really sweet story and a sad commentary on growing up.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  19. “Paul, all saddled up and ready to go…” I think the simple matter-of-factness of that line is perfect; it makes it more real and therefore sadder.

  20. You know that I believe in unicorns and fairy tales. Paul will come back to it.

    Lily

  21. Leave it to an older sibling to snuff out a dream! LOL

  22. Paul, no! (Great name for a unicorn by the way). I love that breathless run on sentence that opens up the story – sets the perfect tone.

  23. MrBinks

    Lovely imagery here, Jessie 🙂

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