Them’s the brakes (Friday Fictioneers)

‘It’s terminal,’ said the doctor, ‘there’s nothing I can do.’

Stuck in the mud, waves lapping at her wheels, she thought about her colourful life. Since her first day as a shopping trolley she loved her job. She got to meet the most interesting people: from young singles to elderly couples who had been together for years.

But the mums with babies were her favourite. The babies always drooled all over her but she gladly put up with that for the chance to hear their babbles and look into their sweet, innocent eyes.

She, herself, never had children.

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Friday Fictioneers is a challenge set by Rochelle Fields where writers around the world create 100 word stories inspired by the one image. For more information see:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/05/07/9-may-2014/

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29 responses to “Them’s the brakes (Friday Fictioneers)

  1. Dear Jessie,

    Do shopping carts give birth? A subject to ponder. Sweet story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  2. You made me cry for a rusty shoppingcart..hmm language is powerful

  3. MrBinks

    Nicely done, Jess 🙂

  4. This is strangely funny yet sad at the same time. I can imagine a shopping cart crossing the road, with a trail of tiny, shiny chrome carts after it, smallest one with a wheel wiggling as it walked. Nice story. As you can see, it fired my imagination. 🙂
    -David

  5. Very nice work, Jessie! I never thought of what a shopping trolley would know. Too bad she’s sleeping with the fishes. Excellent!

  6. A fun and delightful story.

  7. A sweet bit of anthropomorphic fiction. Very well done.

  8. Jessie, A touch sad but humorous just the same. Poor old shopping cart. The thought of “baby” shopping carts is really funny. XD Well written and creative. It’s the first time I’ve ever heard a story from the point of view of a shopping cart. 🙂

    Susan

  9. Jessie, I love the idea of putting up with the drool for the sake of the children. She had a great attitude. But some shopping carts I’ve met aren’t nearly as nice!

    janet

  10. Jessie, how very clever to tell the story from the shopping cart’s P.O.V. Kudos. Really enjoyed reading this tale.

  11. Great POV; I felt for the poor thing.

  12. This made me smile thinking of drooling babies.

  13. Poor thing. Couldn’t she be recycled somehow? Not very green of them. Great story. Lucy

  14. Unique POV, Jessie. I enjoyed the read and the peek into your active imagination.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

  15. Nice twist on the prompt, Jessie. That last sentence wrings the heart; it’s so full of pathos. I always love the clarity of your voice. It makes everything you write appealing.

  16. What a great idea to write in the voice of the shopping cart. Loved it!!!

  17. That last line is amazing, it injects pathos to the story of a ..umm.. shopping trolley (another brilliant idea too)

  18. Such a sweet and moving story, Jessie! Well done.

  19. Cute, and I’ll start putting my shopping carts back now.

  20. What a sad end for the poor little trolley. I’ll treat my trolley more carefully on my next trip to the supermarket!

  21. Lovely. I was wondering what people would do with the trolley. Goody.

  22. Great personification. Scary tale, and sad. I can read your trolley as a character quite easily, too. Well done in that. It’s also a mirror. We’ll all end up stuck in the mud one day. 🙂

  23. Sweet and funny. If shopping trollies do give birth, do you think their offspring are shopping baskets?
    🙂

  24. Jessie, along with others I think writing from the shopping trolley’s point of view was very clever too. A literal interpretation of the photo prompt from a very quirky angle. Great!

  25. Utterly cute! TY for that, Tay.

  26. Definitely wins the prize for “Unique” in this week’s lineup. Great creativity.

  27. Great POV that worked really well. Shopping trolleys are among the many things we take for granted!

  28. Jessie, you are so very clever! Inanimate objects make good listeners – they don’t argue or talk back. However, they do need to unionize because when I go to the local grocery store, I always get a cart with a messed up wheel, shaking and rattling down each aisle. They need better wheel doctors. Good for you in taking up the cause of shopping trolley/carts! Someone needed to. By the way, I love your story – it’s priceless! Nan 🙂

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