Derailment (Friday Fictioneers)

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Image by Dawn Q. Landau at http://talesfromthemotherland.me

Wake. Wee. Wash. Eat. Dress. Drive. Work. Work. Work. Work.

Drive. Cook. Cook. Eat. Clean. Clean. Sit. Watch. Brush. Sleep.

Wake. Snooze. Wake. Wee. Wash. Dress. Drive. Work. Work. Work.

Drive. Cook. Cook. Eat. Clean. Clean. Sit. Watch. Brush. Sleep.

Wake. Wee. Wash. Eat. Dress. Drive. Work. Work. Work. Work.

Drive. Phone. Wait. Pay. Eat. Clean. Sit. Watch. Brush. Sleep.

Wake. Wee. Wash. Eat. Dress. Drive. Honk. Drive. Work. Work.

Drive. Cook. Cook. Eat. Clean. Clean. Sit. Watch. Brush. Sleep.

Wake. Wee. Wash. Wash. Think. Think. Eat. Think. Think. Stop.

Pack. Walk. Slam. Walk. Walk. Walk. Walk. Walk. Walk. Smile.

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Friday Fictioneers is a challenge set by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields where writers around the world create 100 word stories inspired by the one image. For more information follow this link to Rochelle’s FF blog.

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34 responses to “Derailment (Friday Fictioneers)

  1. Dear Jessie,

    A day in the life…I’m worn out. 😉 Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  2. I thought you were describing my life then. Really different.

  3. Ha. Love it., Sounds like my day planner.

  4. Lovely. A great description of life. So good that some thinking happened. I’m smiling.

  5. I guess a day is exactly like that.. add a splash of color and you have it all…

  6. Just the one wee a day then? Wait till she gets a bit older. This is a very effective account of the relentless descent into despair. Well done, Jessie.

  7. This gave me goosebumps. Sharing.

  8. Oh, where is fun.laugh.eat.dance.laugh.sleep? Very innovative form, who knew one could say so much in such a way.

  9. It seems less monotonous in person.

  10. Dear Jesse, How clever you are. I would have never thought of writing a story like this – but it certainly works! WOW! Nan 🙂

  11. I feel like this when I go hiking… day after day the same old thing, and then I can go for a hike on a Saturday and smile.
    What a creative way to tell a story, I was unsure if I liked it at first but by the end I loved it. Great job!

  12. Nice take on the prompt. I think it’s a great way of approaching it…the subject matter means that it’s easy to empathise, and the minimalist prose gives the reader plenty of space to fill in the details with their own imagination.

  13. I love messing about with form, this worked brilliantly, really liked it 🙂

  14. Wonderful! Great take on the prompt with a marvelous message.

  15. Sounds like you’ve been working alongside the railroad all the livelong day.
    Randy

  16. Loved this! And I can relate to the story personally 🙂

  17. Cleverly told tale of the limit being reached.

  18. This is such a unique, moving story, Every word hit home. I wish I could do the Walk. Walk. Smile.

  19. Read. Read. Read. Thnk. Nod. Smile. Like. Comment.

    Well done.
    KT

  20. Now that was neat. I have never written a story using one word sentences. Very cool.

  21. Unique twist this week, Jessie. Well done.

  22. mscwhite

    I love your approach! Fantastic story.

  23. That’s different and kind of sums up many people’s life 🙂 Great job!

  24. Smiling at the end of the week. Glad I’ve never had that amount of hum drum. Well done.

  25. Very clever and original, Jessie! Love it! (and so glad there’s a wee in there 😉 )

  26. Dear Jessie,

    One of the best FF stories I’ve ever read. Imaginative, unique, illuminating, funny, sad, depressing, alive with possibility. Is she coming back, because the title makes me wonder? Excellent work.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  27. Just hopping around to read a few entries. I’m a newbie.
    Fanulous writing … I liked it very much. : )

  28. Wonderful. I love the rhythm and pace, the introduction of ‘think’ just before the end, and then the last line finishes it off perfectly.

  29. how could you manage to write one hundred sentences in a one hundred word post? great

  30. When is the movie adaptation coming out? 🙂

  31. Love your courage in trying different forms of writing, Jessie. So creative and enjoyable to read.

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