3 o’clock (Friday Fictioneers)

It all looked familiar.

The dust on the lampshades. The dirt on the cooker. The sharp edges on the large table that always got in the way.

I’d been in that kitchen before. Too many times.

I pulled my hand away from his. ‘I can’t do this.’

‘What about my second chance?’ he spluttered. ‘Things are going to be different this time…’

Then I saw the clock on the wall stuck at 3 o’clock. The batteries still hadn’t been changed.

‘No.’

I said goodbye and walked out of that kitchen for the very last time.

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Friday Fictioneers is a challenge set by Rochelle each week where writers from around the world post 100 word stories based on a common photo prompt. For more information, and to read other stories, visit Rochelle’s page here.

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33 responses to “3 o’clock (Friday Fictioneers)

  1. Good for her. He hadn’t changed much, so the second chance might have been wasted too.

  2. I think the right decision has just been made.

  3. Good decision. Nice narration.

  4. I guess the batteries where of a symptom of other things undone..

  5. Excellent decision. You can’t judge a book etc, but you can judge a person by their kitchen (and battery-changing skills).

  6. Great story Jess, it tells us a lot in 100 words about their relationship; the clock is a clever symbol of his inability to change and that he is stuck in time. Her recognition that it is time to move forward is shown by her actions. Well done!

  7. I agree. The clock being stuck is brilliant! πŸ™‚

  8. Your dialogue and prose showed the scene well. The clock being stuck on 3 was an excellent reminder of why she’d had enough.

  9. Oh boy this guy just doesn’t know what he doesn’t know. He should have found out what the problem was before committing to changing it.

  10. The straw that broke the camels back. A hard decision.

  11. Kalpana solsi

    Messy people are good at heart, at times. Guess he should be given a fair chance

  12. Hmm, straws and camels’ backs.
    Very clever piece of writing.

  13. Good one! His Time had run out…and so she was Out of there!

  14. Dear Jessie,

    I like the way you used the clock as a metaphor for ‘nothing’s changed.’ Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  15. Nicely done. She’s got her eyes wide open and although she may have made a mistake the first time round, this time she’s onto him. He’s a loser.

  16. Second chances rarely work. Smart of her to get out before getting too invested once again!

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