Food and lodgings included (Friday Fictioneers)

Image by Jennifer Pendergast at http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/

Image by Jennifer Pendergast at http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/

FOR RENT: Spacious room with a view. Enquire within.

Mr Bottomsworth fell in love from the moment he saw the arched entranceway. Inside was perfect for tea parties and his cousins lived just down the hall.

And what a great landlord! Thoughtful enough to leave him some supper the very night he moved in. A big chunk of cheese right by his door.

He tucked his tail into his best dinner suit, smoothed down his whiskers and slipped out through the hole.

That first bite was magnificent.

Thwap!

Oh.

FOR RENT: Spacious room with a view. Enquire within.

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Friday Fictioneers is a challenge set by Rochelle Fields where writers around the world create 100 word stories inspired by the one image. For more information see:

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/05/28/30-may-2014

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55 responses to “Food and lodgings included (Friday Fictioneers)

  1. Very clever Jessie! When this photograph of such a beautifully constructed archway was posted, who could ever have predicted it would inspire visions of a mouse hole? I love the uniqueness of our minds.

    • Thanks Di! I didn’t fancy writing about kings and queens and all these other things the archway first told me, so I thought about it a bit longer. I think it was worth the wait πŸ™‚

  2. Marg jackson

    Laugh out loud brilliant Jessie – loved it. So well written in so few words but so much more punch that way. I had a very different thought when I first saw the photo but strangely it probably fitted on the end of your story

  3. I’m partial to peanut butter.

    Thanks for sharing!

  4. aloha Jessie. yikes. an interesting last supper. aloha.

  5. HAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Jessie, you have gone and DONE IT! Perfect story, best yet! Probably buried the little guy in his dinner suit, too.
    Great!

  6. Poor Mr. Bottomsworth. πŸ™‚

  7. Very cool take on the photo prompt.

  8. What an eye you have! I hadn’t seen it at all. And nicely told. (But I feel sorry for Mr B.)

  9. Oh, how funny! I tend to save mice . . . but . . .

  10. Dear Jessie,

    I’d say it would be a cute illustrated children’s story but I fear it might too disturbing for the younger set. πŸ˜‰ I enjoyed this one very much.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  11. Very funny! Love that it ends in the same way as it begins. The tiny cycle of life and death continues…. πŸ™‚

  12. Brilliant! And what a fabulously ornate mousehole in the picture!

  13. MrBinks

    When I got to “A big chunk of cheese..” I was grinning from ear to ear. Well set up and brilliantly executed (sorry). Nice one!

  14. Jessie, Really cute story except for Mr. Bottomsworth’s unfortunate end. Very original to see the arch as a mousehole and end the story the same as the beginning.. His cousins should have warned him. I agree that without the ending and lengthened it would make a good children’s story. Well written. πŸ™‚ —Susan

  15. Hilarious! I didn’t see it coming. Great story!

  16. Dee

    Great tale (sorry) very enjoyable read and a good twist.
    Dee

  17. Aww, poor Mr Bottomsworth! I liked this story, in spite of its sad ending, and enjoyed the way you bookended it with the advertisement

  18. Jessie, LOVE this story! Clever, well written and funny… but truly, clever. This has left me smiling, and for a while I think. πŸ˜€

  19. VERY clever and original πŸ™‚ Loved this!

  20. Dear Jessie, CLEVER not cleaver! You are so smart and this is hilarious! When I got to the cheese part (free dinner) I started laughing. This is a hoot, and to start and finish with the Ad – Brilliant! You win, you win, you win! Nan πŸ™‚

  21. Mr Bottomsworth indeed! All this needs is a Beatrix Potter illustration to complete it πŸ™‚

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