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FOR RENT: Spacious room with a view. Enquire within.
Mr Bottomsworth fell in love from the moment he saw the arched entranceway. Inside was perfect for tea parties and his cousins lived just down the hall.
And what a great landlord! Thoughtful enough to leave him some supper the very night he moved in. A big chunk of cheese right by his door.
He tucked his tail into his best dinner suit, smoothed down his whiskers and slipped out through the hole.
That first bite was magnificent.
Thwap!
Oh.
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Friday Fictioneers is a challenge set by Rochelle Fields where writers around the world create 100 word stories inspired by the one image. For more information see:
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Jessie Ansons 
Very clever Jessie! When this photograph of such a beautifully constructed archway was posted, who could ever have predicted it would inspire visions of a mouse hole? I love the uniqueness of our minds.
Thanks Di! I didn’t fancy writing about kings and queens and all these other things the archway first told me, so I thought about it a bit longer. I think it was worth the wait 🙂
Laugh out loud brilliant Jessie – loved it. So well written in so few words but so much more punch that way. I had a very different thought when I first saw the photo but strangely it probably fitted on the end of your story
Thanks Marg! It was wonderful reading it out on the weekend too and getting that instant feedback from the audience too.
I’m partial to peanut butter.
Thanks for sharing!
Ha! Eating it yourself or leaving it out for unsuspecting tenants? Thanks for the read.
Very funny and macabre!
Thanks! Next week I promise not to kill off the protagonist! Well, I promise to try.
aloha Jessie. yikes. an interesting last supper. aloha.
Aloha Rick! And thank you. We went to Hawaii for our honeymoon so an Aloha is always so nice!
fun. people are usually very decided on Hawaii. either really liking it or really disliking it. it sounds like you had fun. cool on that. and aloha on. aloha.
Marvelous! Love it!
Thank you Caerlynn!
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Jessie, you have gone and DONE IT! Perfect story, best yet! Probably buried the little guy in his dinner suit, too.
Great!
What wonderful feedback! Thank you for your kind words. Let’s hope he had a nice funeral… future FF theme perhaps…?
Poor Mr. Bottomsworth. 🙂
It’s always the most trusting ones that go… Thanks for reading!
Very cool take on the photo prompt.
Thank you! Glad you liked it 🙂
What an eye you have! I hadn’t seen it at all. And nicely told. (But I feel sorry for Mr B.)
Thank you! I’m glad everyone was still able to make the connection to the photo 🙂
Oh, how funny! I tend to save mice . . . but . . .
I myself couldn’t bring myself to killing one in a dinner suit!
Dear Jessie,
I’d say it would be a cute illustrated children’s story but I fear it might too disturbing for the younger set. 😉 I enjoyed this one very much.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle. I’ve been reading a bit of Beatrix Potter to my son lately, so no doubt there was some inspiration there!
Very funny! Love that it ends in the same way as it begins. The tiny cycle of life and death continues…. 🙂
It sure does! Thank you for your comment 🙂
Brilliant! And what a fabulously ornate mousehole in the picture!
Only the best for Mr Bottomsworth!
When I got to “A big chunk of cheese..” I was grinning from ear to ear. Well set up and brilliantly executed (sorry). Nice one!
Thank you! I have to say since becoming a fan of your work I’ve been experimenting on the silly side. It sure is fun to write!
Oh? I have a fan? I HAVE A FAN!!
Aha…that mad me laugh!
Thanks Dawn. I’m glad I could make you laugh!
Jessie, Really cute story except for Mr. Bottomsworth’s unfortunate end. Very original to see the arch as a mousehole and end the story the same as the beginning.. His cousins should have warned him. I agree that without the ending and lengthened it would make a good children’s story. Well written. 🙂 —Susan
Thanks Susan! I am keen to write a children’s story, just haven’t been game yet. One day!
Hilarious! I didn’t see it coming. Great story!
Thank you for the lovely comments!
Great tale (sorry) very enjoyable read and a good twist.
Dee
Hehe, tale hey? Thanks for your lovely comment.
Rats, that was a clever twist…
Rats, indeed 🙂
Aww, poor Mr Bottomsworth! I liked this story, in spite of its sad ending, and enjoyed the way you bookended it with the advertisement
Thank you! Glad you liked it!
Jessie, LOVE this story! Clever, well written and funny… but truly, clever. This has left me smiling, and for a while I think. 😀
Wonderful! So glad it was able to give that response 🙂
VERY clever and original 🙂 Loved this!
Thanks for the read Ade!
Dear Jessie, CLEVER not cleaver! You are so smart and this is hilarious! When I got to the cheese part (free dinner) I started laughing. This is a hoot, and to start and finish with the Ad – Brilliant! You win, you win, you win! Nan 🙂
Thank you Nan, what a wonderful comment! Perhaps a cleaver would have also done the job 😉 Sorry, too soon Mr Bottomsworth?
Mr Bottomsworth indeed! All this needs is a Beatrix Potter illustration to complete it 🙂
I am a very recent fan of Ms Potter since reading the stories to my son. Agree one of those illustrations would be perfect (pre-supper though of course)
No kidding! I’ve read every story Beatrix ever wrote to my granddaughter… many times.
I LOVE THIS ONE!!!
In my exuberance, I forgot to say how clever this is.