Way too serious (Friday Fictioneers)

Image by Al Forbes

Back in the car, Eloise was smirking. From under her shirt she pulled a vintage brass car horn.

“I snapped it off that old-timey car back there. It’s for our long drives.”

Jay’s jaw dropped.

She continued. “I’ll honk it if I think you’re getting too up tight.”

He frowned. “You can’t go around stealing!”

She laughed. “See? You’re way too serious… all the time.”

“This isn’t funny!”

She held the horn up to his face.

“Eloise!”

HEEEE-HONK!

He stopped talking. And the hint of a smile crept into the corners of his mouth.

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I recently finished Alice’s Adventures in Wonderland as part of my 100 book reading challenge. See what I thought of it byΒ clicking here.

Friday Fictioneers is a challenge set by Rochelle each week where writers from around the world post 100 word stories based on a common photo prompt. For more information, and to read other stories, visit Rochelle’s pageΒ here.

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26 responses to “Way too serious (Friday Fictioneers)

  1. Haha, brilliant. I can think of a few people I know and a few famous people who are in need of that treatment. Loved it.

  2. I think I would have made her take it back.

    True story: About twenty minutes from where I live is something called the Warhawk Air Museum. The name is a bit of a misnomer because it contains not just vintage aircraft, but cars, uniforms, and all sorts of other memorabilia from the past hundred years or so.

    Some months ago, I took my seven-year-old grandson to see the place and we spent hours there.

    There were signs all over the place saying not to touch anything.

    My grandson really, really wanted to touch some of the artifacts, and I had to explain that even if touching one thing for a second didn’t damage it, we still had to respect the wishes of the owners as well as all the people who have yet to visit the museum.

  3. This made me wonder whose side the author took in that debate.Jay loses, but is that where you want the reader’s sympathy to lie?

  4. Love, love, love the humour in this piece, Jessie and I particularly love the way in which it depicts the two characters, particularly Eloise. Well done!

  5. Now, now… stealing is bad… but I see her point in trying to get him to lighten up… πŸ˜‰

  6. michael1148humphris

    She sounds a right character,πŸ˜‰

  7. Sometimes, you got to lighten up. I kept seeing a cross-country ride with Harpo Marx. πŸ˜€

  8. And the next scene is where the cops stop them, hearing the sound of a horn that has been reported stolen. πŸ™‚

  9. handmadejewelryhaven

    LOL…I love her. So feisty!

  10. Dear Jessie,

    I can’t condone her theft…on the other hand cute story. Like Jay, I had to smile.
    AAAA-OOOOGAH!

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  11. She was wrong to take the horn but her mischief and sense of life makes you empathise for her and I think he does to.

  12. Mixed feelings about your heroine, but sounds like life with her could be quite unpredictable.

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