La Siesta (Friday Fictioneers)

Image by DLovering at http://40again.com/

Image by DLovering at http://40again.com/

During siesta the city sleeps. The streets are silent; not a soul to be seen.

During siesta a young girl cries in a phone booth. A toddler plays with his trucks. An old woman watches Days of our Lives. Two lovers make love.

During siesta a doctor treats his patients. A mother sips her coffee. A girl braids her sister’s hair. A man changes a light globe. A woman vacuums the rug. A baby cries for a feed. An old man dies.

During siesta the streets are silent.

And the city is very much alive.

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Friday Fictioneers is a challenge set by Rochelle Fields where writers around the world create 100 word stories inspired by the one image. For more information see: http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/04/09/11-april-2014

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57 responses to “La Siesta (Friday Fictioneers)

  1. Dear Jessie,

    Your last line seals the deal. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  2. MrBinks

    I need a nap.

  3. yes. well done! easy to see the many stories in the not so slumbering town.

  4. This was a beautiful and emotional tapestry of snapshots. Well done! Absolutely adored the last line!.

  5. Very well done. A lot going on for a sleepy town. Great description. ๐Ÿ™‚

  6. Yes I have always imagined all the things that can happen behind the closed jalousies… indeed quite a lot.

  7. Very rhythmic – and very siesta-like. I feel warm and sleepy ๐Ÿ™‚

  8. Life is the simple, little things that go on behind closed doors. Well written tale.

  9. A nice “secret” vision of life continuing in it’s mundane capacity. The rhythm of your story was magical.

  10. Good imagery. Naked City style.

  11. Really nice, Jessie. You took us through the city and gave us a peek into many lives we wouldn’t otherwise have glimpsed had we even been foolish enough to go out during siesta time

    janet

  12. Zzzz… nice job, Jessie. Enjoyed my siesta, too. ๐Ÿ˜‰ (You did not lull me to sleep … on the contrary, your story suggested all the scenes behind what appears to be stillness. Loved it.)

  13. I look forward to your posts each week Jessie, and I wasn’t disappointed with this week’s. You craft a good story.

  14. Such a lovely idea. That all the life is behind closed doors in the middle of the afternoon.
    Claire

  15. I love a good list story, Jessie. And this one is superbly and vividly told.

  16. Excellent story Jessie and a lovely insightful conclusion. Very well done enjoyed this piece.

  17. Fantastic! You condensed the whole life a city here.

  18. A really clever piece of observation. Love the repetition – it certainly drives the piece.

  19. I loved this – was really drawn in.

  20. Jessie, The rhythm of the prose was like reading a wonderful children’s book… for adults. ๐Ÿ˜‰ The final line of this post really ties this up nicely.

  21. I love naps too, but I know my house doesn’t always take one when I do. Good prose! I enjoyed the repetition! Nan ๐Ÿ™‚

  22. that last line is fabulous. Well done!

  23. Jessie, I love the way you have depicted the fact that life moves forward in countless little ways even when all seems dormant. Beautifully done.

  24. This story had a lovely poetic tone and the little insights into so many lives brought the sleeping city to life ๐Ÿ™‚

  25. Dee

    Always interesting to imagine what goes on behind the doors of the seemingly sleeping town at siesta time
    Well done

  26. Hmmm . . . well, much different from siesta times in countries that take it seriously. Interesting take on the prompt. I’m curious as to where your story takes place that a woman would vacuum a rug during siesta or a doctor would schedule appointments during siesta. Of course, here in my native Kansas City, we simply wish for siesta rather than take it, and there’s no such thing as a sleeping city, especially midday.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

    • I was in the south of Spain when I observed these things and I was shocked to find that so few people actually slept! There was certainly vacuuming during siesta where I lived (and other things). In this example I imagined a doctor in the emergency department… I’m sure they keep working right through the day and night.

  27. I had to read another of your stories to see make sure that first one I read was not a fluke. It wasn’t… if you keep this kind of writing up I will have to follow you.

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